Wednesday, December 29, 2010

The Pillow Case


Thanks to Lovely Annie, I discovered a new poetic form this morning: the etheree. An etheree is a poem with ten lines, with an additional syllable for each line. It starts with one syllable and ends with ten. I love playing with new forms and had to try this one out. Here is my all-too-autobiographical account.



The Pillow Case

So
I sew
the pillow
case. The whir whir
blur of the Kenmore's
pace makes the needle jab,
the needle stab, the thread grab
the fabric, a cambric, candent
and delicate, so delicate it
can't handle the tread of the thread and shreds.


23 comments:

  1. The playful repetitions suits this form quite well...Nice job!

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  2. I read on OSW and learn new forms. such fun, yet too difficult to get to all 120 or more. Glad I was able to stop by here.

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  3. Great plays on word and sound. Creative use of what seems to me at second glance (saw Annie's this morning) a difficult form. Nice write!

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  4. This was great fun. I love the sound.

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  5. a delightful entry, have fun ...

    let me know after you completed 18 poets visiting...

    do tag poets rally if you can ...
    keep up the excellence.

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  6. I'd say you have an amazing grasp of your new discovery. This was delightful!!

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  7. Wow, I sincerely couldn't do that, and if I could, I'd never master it like you do!

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  8. That is such a fun new form! Does it always include the rhyme too? I thought the rhyming within lines added a lot. :)

    Rhyme Me a Smile

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  9. I love this, Lizzi--so charming. You did a wonderful job here. Having sewn quite a bit in the past, I could relate to your topic here.

    I just tried this form for the first time too. It was fun to try.

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  10. this to me is so groovy- love it! mine for this thursday- http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/02/14/hunger/

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  11. Love the wordplay of this. Almost whimsical, but not quite, given some of the images.

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  12. Love the internal and beginning line rhymes. They affect the reading of the poem and add to the pleasure.
    margo

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  13. I wanted to read to the end as you stitched together a perfect little poem. I also wanted to pull out the Bernina and whip up a project. See how inspirational you are?

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  14. Thanks for the nice comments, everybody!

    @Jingle: I tagged the post, and am on my way to 18 comments. Thank you!

    @Rachel: No, the etheree doesn't require any particular rhyme scheme... I just liked trying to capture the rhythm of the sewing machine, and the growing tension of the situation. :-)

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  15. I like this I can just hear the sewing machine.

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  16. I to love stitching! What a rhyme..U love ur art :)
    ~ http://puplumages.wordpress.com/2010/12/29/sunshine-on-my-shoulder/

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  17. Beautiful poem! I enjoy the flow of it!

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  18. Clever word choices.

    cha
    http://chaspalette.wordpress.com/2011/01/07/photograph/

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  19. You make this look easy, which I'm sure it isn't. I, too, like to try new forms ... loved the haiku when I found it. I will have to try this. Your blog looks like a lot of creativity goes on here. I became a follower!

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  20. Oh gorgeous! Found in Poets rally week 36. Absolutely. Pretty.

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